SPF: Hidden Stars

160 06 June 12th 2016

Alexis wanted to see the stars twinkle. It had been her favourite rhyme growing up, but she bitterly resigned herself to the fact that she never would. The disease had taken away her eyesight as a baby and she blamed her mother.

Julia wept silently whenever Alexis flew into a rage, but listened quietly to her daughter voice her resentment. She too blamed herself for not taking a second opinion when the first doctor had brushed off the symptoms and asked her not to worry. By then it was too late and Alexis was confined to darkness.

One day Doctor Preston called Alexis.

“Your mother’s ill and she’s not taking her medication.”

Alexis shrugged.

“I’ve reminded her from time to time, what else can I do?”

“You misunderstand,” he paused.

“The reason she’s not doing so, is because she wants to die….so she can donate her corneas to you, which is not possible while she’s alive.”

For the first time in years, Alexis sobbed for someone other than herself. For the first time in years, she hugged her mother and whispered, I’m sorry.

For the first time in what felt like forever, Julia smiled, through silent tears of joy.

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Author: Ugly Aphrodite (Available on Amazon Kindle) Ah, the need to get your thoughts out there! Happy reading folks!
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18 Responses to SPF: Hidden Stars

  1. jademwong says:

    Omg, this was painful to read. The selflessness of a mother’s love, so often we take it for granted. You’ve captured the pain and regret of the daughter wonderfully.

  2. Lyn says:

    I’m reading this through tears.

  3. mandibelle16 says:

    Oh how sad. That Alexis was so angry with her mother. And what a sacrifice, the mother was willing to make to make things right, so her daughter could have sight. Thank goodness Alexis stopped being self-centred and her and her mother worked things out, worked out what’s truly important in life.

    • swritings says:

      Yes! Her mother’s love and the sacrifice she was willing to make made Alexis realize how heartbroken her mother was as well. Thanks for your comment! ☺

  4. milliethom says:

    A very poignant story. A mother’s love is unconditional – no matter how the child behaves or feels towards her – but how sad that Alexis blamed her mother for the loss of her eyesight for so many years. The emotional ending rounds your story off beautifully, and holds promise for a better relationship between them from now on.

    • swritings says:

      That’s very true, a mother’s love is indeed unconditional. It’s sad that Alexis wasted all those years blaming her mother but now their relationship should now take take a turn for the better and hopefully be much stronger. Thank you so much for reading and commenting! ☺

  5. draliman says:

    Beautiful, so touching.

  6. How sad but beautiful!

  7. powerful story. Brought a tear to my eye.

  8. Good story, SW. The dialogue was well done. Thorough descriptions and a lovely happy ending. 🙂 —- Suzanne

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