FFftPP: Gotcha!


Never smile at a crocodile
No, you can’t get friendly with a crocodile…

Jessie hummed as she stacked the boxes on the veranda.

“You know they’re alligators, not crocodiles,” Patrick remarked loftily.

Jessie ignored him, as most people around the zoo did whenever he came with a delivery, usually droning out annoying platitudes.

Her peripheral vision caught him take a step toward her and she quickly darted to the door.

It all happened instantly, Jessie tripped, grabbing the first thing that came into her hand, which happened to be Patrick’s collar, Patrick stumbled clumsily and promptly went over the railing, jerking Jessie along with him.

Instinctively she let go and he disappeared from view, dangling dangerously above the alligator enclosure.

“H-help!” stammered a terrified Patrick.

His fingers slipped and he landed with a thud in the murky swamp.

“The crocodiles!” shrieked Patrick, slipping in the sticky mud, his twisted ankle not helping his awkward movements.

“Patrick!” yelled Jessie.

“They’ve been shifted to another enclosure, this one’s being cleaned!”

Patrick stopped flapping his arms and saw only the grinning faces of the zoo hands nearby.

“Oh and Patrick!” Jessie called out. “They’re not crocs, they’re alligators!”

Patrick glared at her, red-faced.

For Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner

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Author: Ugly Aphrodite (Available on Amazon Kindle) Ah, the need to get your thoughts out there! Happy reading folks!
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16 Responses to FFftPP: Gotcha!

  1. Lyn says:

    Ha! Serves him right. That’ll larn him! 😀

  2. mandibelle16 says:

    Sounds like this annoying guy got the scare of his life. Maybe he’ll act a bit better now that they’ve frightened him so much. Nice write S.

  3. Gary says:

    Very good…I’m rubbish at flash fiction…even short stories I find taxing…give my a book though 🙃

    Admire those that can do this though….and as others say…serves him right 🙃

    • swritings says:

      Haha! Everyone has their own particular interests when it comes to writing. So it’s a good mix to have on sites such as this. Thank you so much for reading and commenting! 🙂

      • Gary says:

        That they do….I had a crack at a blog battle last week which had a 1500 word limit…The God Strain 1 & 2 if you feel like dipping into the none kindness writing….and you are quite welcome re the visit….kindness clause activated 😇

  4. The Voice says:

    Well, she told him. Cute story (and a bit of a relief for Patrick).

  5. luckyjc007 says:

    Patrick will have a real story to tell now when friends and family get together, but he probably would have skipped over this experience if he had been given the choice. Great story. 🙂

  6. bikurgurl says:

    That was a little terrifying!

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