FFfAW: Without You

“Cancer schamancer,” David grinned.

“Oh, stop being so cavalier about it,” said Becky fiercely, tears streaming down her face.

David put his arm around his younger sister.

“Becks, I promise I’ll fight this..but you must promise not to worry about me.”

Becky swallowed and tried to smile.

Five months and a bald head later, David took in the view as Becky put the final touches with her paint brush.

“Golden Gate Bridge, check!” she called.

During the treatment the doctor had been wary. Would David survive? Yes, but it was only a matter of time. The cancer would return.

The road trip had been Becky’s idea and she also suggested that they preserve it in this creative manner, where she used her artistic skills to paint every special landmark on Dad’s old car.

David realized that the only thing more painful than an early death was knowing how utterly devastated his sister would be without him.

Whispering a fervent prayer he implored, ” Please God, take care of my baby sis when I’m gone.”

For Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers


Famous landmarks were painted by the Phool Patti team during the classic car show in Germany. There is San Francisco’s Golden Gate Bridge, Islamabad’s Faisal Mosque, the Kuwait Towers, Tehran’s Milad Tower, Germany’s  Brandenburg Gate, Egypt’s Giza Pyramids and Delhi’s India Gate.
Source: (facebook.com/phoolpatti1/posts/454750121398185)

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27 Responses to FFfAW: Without You

  1. Yinglan says:

    What a touching story. I enjoyed reading it and the interesting background behind the picture.

  2. Such a sad heart touching story! That is sweet that he is praying for his sister when he is the one dying with cancer! Wonderful story! I enjoyed learning about the car in the photo. Thank you so much for loaning it to us for our prompt this week.

  3. M Chaillot says:

    Hot tears sprang to my eyes–you got to me.

  4. mandibelle16 says:

    Very bittersweet. It’s so lovely they have all these memories together, David’s sister painted on his car. But they also seem close, and i have no doubt it will hurt her greatly when her brother passes on sooner, rather than later. Great job at portraying such emotion in your piece. David’s last line got me, his prayer for his little sister. Almost made me cry 😦

    • swritings says:

      Bittersweet was what I was going for! ☺ They do have a strong bond and it’s really agonizing for him to think of not being there for his sister. Hopefully praying helped him feel more at peace. Thanks for your comment! 😊

  5. Singledust says:

    Beautiful story. My brother and I are very close and I feel the strength of their bond in the story. Even in his pain he comforted her.

    • swritings says:

      How wonderful that you have such a strong bond with your brother! Such siblings are always there for one another, through good times and bad. Thank you for your comment! ☺

  6. Ellespeth says:

    Sad and uplifting story all in one.
    Ellespeth

  7. Touching and very poignant x

  8. afairymind says:

    Such a sad story. The relationship between the siblings is beautiful and heartbreaking. Nicely done. 🙂 Thanks for the extra information about the car.

  9. Lyn says:

    This brought a lump to my throat and tears to my eyes. What a beautiful story of sibling love.

  10. jademwong says:

    That is indeed a beautiful and creative way to preserve the old car. I’d like to think he beat the cancer 🙂

  11. Ellespeth says:

    i’ve come back to read this again…sometimes once is not enough. it so much touches upon my life right now. shoring each other up…i really like the way David calls Becky Becks. It’s so personal and meaningful to your story.

    ellespeth

    • swritings says:

      Gosh, thank you so much! It really means a lot! I’m thrilled that the story struck a chord with you, especially how David calls his sister Becks. Thanks once again for stopping by! ☺

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