FFftPP: The Detective

“Did you bring the shovel?” whispered Al.

Ted proudly presented the tool, glinting under the dimly lit lamp.

Al slapped his forehead

“That’s a trowel, you fool!”

“Well, you try smuggling in anything larger than this under the nose of that meddlesome woman,” responded Ted indignantly.

“Oh, never mind!” Al grabbed the light and held it aloft.

“There, that’s where we’ll start digging for the body,” he said, gesturing.

“Are you sure it’s here?”

“It has to be! Rumor has it Old Man Rufus buried it himself, before he was found hanging in the motel across town.”


Both men jumped.

“If you’re done for now, everyone’s gathered in the dining room,” Mrs. Barrow’s voice echoed down to the backyard.

Al and Ted looked grumpily at each other.

“What are they up to now?” questioned Hilda, untying her apron and joining Mrs. Barrow on the patio.

Mrs. Barrow smiled.

“Probably another harmless mystery cooked up by Al, he really misses being a detective you know.”

Hobbling up the garden path, Al and Ted joined the other residents of Barrow’s Old Age Home.

Their investigation would have to wait till after supper.

Written for Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner

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Author: Ugly Aphrodite (Available on Amazon Kindle) Ah, the need to get your thoughts out there! Happy reading folks!
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21 Responses to FFftPP: The Detective

  1. Jenn says:

    Good story. This will probably be me when I’m an old lady, still having adventures, even if I have to invent them myself.

  2. M Chaillot says:

    This is wonderful!

  3. Lyn says:

    LOL that was a fun story 🙂 I can just see it happening.

  4. mandibelle16 says:

    I feel bad for the guy. He misses his job. It’s hard being old. But you can’t miss dinner time. Kind of sad when that’s the highlight of your day. Nice take.

    • swritings says:

      Being old has its own challenges! It just depends on how much effort you try to put in to keep yourself happy. Thank you for your comment! ☺

  5. Brilliant. You really brought the scene to life.

    Here is my FFftPP

  6. luckyjc007 says:

    Funny. 🙂 At least they are enjoying themselves and are not doing any harm. Very delightful story.

  7. I love adventures. Keeps the mind sharp. Good story

  8. Deb says:

    This is beautiful.

  9. afairymind says:

    I kind of hope he’s right and finds a body, just to prove that age hasn’t dulled his investigative abilities. I can actually easily see this as a tv detective series… Great story. 🙂

  10. timkeen40 says:

    All of us just want to stay relevant. Great story.


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