FFftPP: Gauche Gabe

“It’s in here somewhere…,”

“You’re useless at this, let me see!”

Abe grabbed the guidebook from Gabe’s hand.

“Aha! Here it is…they’re called meerkats!” declared Abe triumphantly.

“But they don’t look like no cats,” said Gabe confused, scratching his head.

Abe groaned.

“Forget it!” he sighed, “Let’s just go to the platypus enclosure.”

“Oh, the ones that look like ducks but don’t quack!” beamed Gabe.

“Keep your voice down,” hissed Abe, embarrassed. He could see the two kids standing nearby now snickering and whispering to each other.

“What did you say?” asked Gabe in a loud voice, making Abe jump.

“And what’s that peculiar smell? Is it coming from that baby or the anima….,”

Gabe wasn’t allowed to finish, as a highly pink-faced Abe yanked his twin brother by the collar and dragged him away, as the mother with the stroller gave them an icy stare on their way out of the enclosure.

Written for Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner

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19 Responses to FFftPP: Gauche Gabe

  1. mandibelle16 says:

    Haha. Brother’s goading each other. Pretty classic. Well told.

  2. The Voice says:

    Don’t we all know a Gabe from somewhere? The person that just doesn’t quite “get it”. Had an old friend from high school that was like that. He got good grades but had no common sense. Good thing this Gabe has his brother. Nice story!

  3. Incredible!
    I started my blog this month, and it is a pleasure that I came across your blog.
    It has inspired me to start my third article.
    Thank you 🙂

  4. Dorah A. K. says:

    Funny! Thanks for the laugh 🙂

  5. draliman says:

    Ah Gabe, bless him and his big mouth 🙂

  6. Typical of boys. A good ribbing and squabbling 🙂

  7. Lynn Love says:

    Haha! Very good. Really like the dialogue between the brothers – very real. And some lovely touches of humour between them. Really well written. 🙂

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