Six Sentence Story – Charge

My first ever entry for the Six Sentence Story challenge! πŸ™‚

The platoon stood ready, poised for battle, weapons in check, expressions grim.

“Ok men, this is it, get ready….charge!”

Instead, all heads turned and looked at Jeremy, he was sniffing quite loudly now.

“I really need to go to the bathroom, I really do!”

Mrs. Hendricks sighed and emerged from behind the curtain.

“Take a break class, we’ll start rehearsals again in ten minutes.”


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Author: Ugly Aphrodite (Available on Amazon Kindle) Ah, the need to get your thoughts out there! Happy reading folks!
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15 Responses to Six Sentence Story – Charge

  1. lrconsiderer says:

    Ohhhh BLESS! Hehehe. Great way of re-working the (potential) setting πŸ™‚

  2. oldegg says:

    There is always one that leave it until too late, mind you giving them 10 minutes they’ll all want to go! Welcome to the mad house let’s hope you visit again.

  3. ivywalker says:

    Hahaha!!! I totally got sucked in!!!! Great story!

  4. ivywalker says:

    Hey!!! This is your first entry!!!! WELCOME!!! NICE DEBUT!!!

  5. yeah, I second zoe (aka ivy)… Welcome to the Six Sentence Story… quite an impressive debut! (engaging, familiar (either through experience or culture) twist ending (with the double bonus of being able to identify with the surprise ending.)
    very nice

    • swritings says:

      Thank you so much! What a lovely welcome by all!☺ It’s great to be a part of this! Thank you for such a well thought out comment! Glad you liked it! πŸ™‚

  6. valj2750 says:

    I definitely want to read more of your SSStories in the future. This was great, the joys of teaching children – never get to caught up in the moment, because nature always comes a-callin’. That or you need to tie someone’s shoes so they don’t trip.

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