Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner


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The last time everything fit in three duffles, Ted had finally convinced Clare to run away with him.

She was seventeen and would soon have to leave the orphanage. Life hadn’t been very fair to her, so maybe Ted was right, you have to take what you need, forcibly if the time comes. She drove the getaway car as Ted broke into the store and emptied the cash register. Several months with Ted, her moral compass all but lost, it was early one Sunday morning when he told her about this motorbike he’d seen in an open garage. They canvassed the place and Ted proudly slid a shiny revolver out from under his jacket. For the first time, Clare hesitated but as always, Ted managed to placate her fears.

Minutes later hearing the gunshot, she raced towards the garage. Ted was standing over a small figure lying motionless on the ground. It had all happened so fast, he’d insisted, he didn’t know it was a kid.

Clare fled and turned herself in to the nearest police station. She was taken to a juvenile detention facility. For the first time in months, she felt herself relax.

“…Next time you’re faced with a choice, do the right thing. It hurts everyone less in the long run.”  
– Wendelin Van Draanen

“Integrity is doing the right thing, even when no one is watching.” – C.S. Lewis 

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Author: Ugly Aphrodite (Available on Amazon Kindle) Ah, the need to get your thoughts out there! Happy reading folks!
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22 Responses to Accountability

  1. mandibelle16 says:

    I enjoyed your story. It sounds like she didn’t have a good life in the orphanage and that her life diteriorated with her boyfriend who was heading fast into a life of crime. How sad he was willing to use a gun and his desire to use caused him to shoot a child. How awful for that child’s parents. And I’m glad that Clare does the right thing and turns herself in. I’m glad she finally feels peaceful in juvy. It must be hard, but I think she could find there she could learn some skills for life. Maybe get some education to get a job? Great job. Your story pulled me in.

    • swritings says:

      Thank you!! You’re interpreted the story perfectly! Yes, I wanted to end it with Clare realizing that true peace was only possible when you follow the right path, even though it may be hard at first. Thank you so much for your comment! 🙂

  2. luckyjc007 says:

    It’s too bad Clare was at a vulnerable stage in her life when she met Ted. At least she had the presence of mind to go to the police when she found out he had a gun and used it! If not, her life may have taken an entirely different path. Great story.

  3. maria says:

    Wow. Great story with a lot of moral lesson. I especially like your Wendelin Van Draanen quote. 😀 Well done. I’m glad she found the right path…

  4. It is amazing just how far people will go when there is any kind of peer pressure involved. I am glad she found the strength to walk away from him in the end.

    • swritings says:

      So true! It does take a lot of strength to walk away, especially when peer pressure is involved. It takes courage to say ‘no’ at times. Thank you so much for your comment! 🙂

  5. Sonya says:

    I hope Ted doesn’t literally get away with murder (or manslaughter, at the very least…). Good story, and the last paragraph is excellent – I like the idea that juvenile detention makes her relax, it says so much about her character.

    • swritings says:

      Hopefully Clare will have the courage to make sure Ted is held accountable as well. Yes, I wanted to make her character realize that true peace was possible when you do the right thing, no matter how hard it may be for you. Thank you for your comment! 🙂

  6. Wonderful story with a great moral to it. How sad that she ended up with a boy that is a thief/killer. I’m glad she did the right thing at the end.

  7. Excellent story! I like that Clare took responsibility for her actions instead of just running away again.

  8. What moral courage and strength you have written so well of here! Beautiful!

  9. amymorrisjones says:

    Somehow the fact that he shoots a child just makes him unforgivable. I can’t blame her for running in the opposite direction. Nice piece!

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