First Steps

My Sunday Photo Fiction Challenge!

134 12 December 13th 2015

And when the green man flashed for the third time, she was still standing on the sidewalk. Pedestrians jostled past, shopping bags grazed against her legs but she stood still. Then, right on cue, the throngs of people were stationary along with her.

Jessica took a deep breath and closed her eyes, even though everything was dark either way.

Now. And the crowds started moving to and fro once again.

Her timing was accurate, yet she continued to remain firmly rooted to her spot.

“Miss, would you like some help?”

She felt herself jerk to the sound of the voice.

“No-o, I…it’s fine,” she mumbled and felt herself turning red.

Why had he offered to help? Was this how it would be from now on? She hated her white cane even more, exposing her so mercilessly to the whole world.

Take the first step Jess, take it!ย 

But willpower failed and she turned around and went inside the apartment justย behind her.

She would try again tomorrow. Try to join the world so cruelly hidden from her after the disease hit. Try to take the first step across the road she had crossed countless times in her life full of light.


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19 Responses to First Steps

  1. Steve Lakey says:

    A sad story, but there are still signs of hope. She hasn’t given up.

  2. Joy Pixley says:

    Great job capturing the fear and anxiety someone in that position must feel — what a horrible transition that must be, having to learn to live without your sight all of a sudden.

  3. ceayr says:

    This is quite a distressing tale, but well told.
    Good piece.

  4. Jenn says:

    She’ll do it tomorrow. As long as she doesn’t give up, she’ll make it. Nice story!

  5. mandibelle16 says:

    Great story. If you had trouble walking after an accident, it might very well be difficult to go far, even cross a road. I felt your characters indecision as she waited to try and cross.

  6. Quiche says:

    Great Story! I could really feel the subjects apprehension in your writing, I compared it to my depression where you wanted to go outside that damn front door and simply can not. as your feet have grown roots into the floor you are standing on and no matter what you cannot move forward. Feeling like my feet are cement blocks! I want to read more…

    • swritings says:

      I hope relating to certain stories has a positive effect on readers…I tried to end it with a feeling of hope, that she will continue trying, no matter how long it takes!

  7. Losing a sense is awful, especially if it is one you rely on at all times. A great story of hope and the fact that there was someone willing to help.

  8. Danny James says:

    Nice take on the prompt and well written.


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