Premature Freedom

My Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge!

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A spectral gloom hung over the room. Apt surroundings for Mary, for the hope that burgeoned in her heart and thoughts that evoked nostalgic recollections and ones of failure.

The last scene was to be acted out today. “The last scene,” she whispered repeatedly to herself. If they only knew.

The clicks of the camera, the scurrying of feet, the shouts of the director. Finally, the last act of the day, of her life, as she sat motionless, draped in red satin and silk.

How many would weep over her grave? How many would attend because they wanted to and not because the world’s eyes would be transfixed on the shockingly demise of yet another child, of the billionaire  Graham McCalvin. The one who turned her back on the family fortune, who was never good enough.

She wondered if father’s tears would be real, whether they’d flow at all. But what she did know, was she would finally be free and so would papa. Of her.

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Author: Ugly Aphrodite (Available on Amazon Kindle) Ah, the need to get your thoughts out there! Happy reading folks!
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22 Responses to Premature Freedom

  1. Wow. Powerful story! Excellent! Welcome to the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge!

  2. Sonya says:

    Wow, that’s powerful, heart-breaking stuff. Poor Mary…

  3. Martin Flux says:

    Moving story—yet I wish it gave a few more hints as to what actions have brought her to this point.

  4. justmaria says:

    Curious. My mind wanders to countless possibilities and twists as to why she did that…

  5. Wonderful story! My favorite section is “The clicks of the camera, the scurrying of feet, the shouts of the director. Finally, the last act of the day, of her life, as she sat motionless, draped in red satin and silk.”

  6. I enjoyed your take on this image and felt you wrote in a very reflective way, well done enjoyed reading.

  7. Freedom at such a price, told beautifully!

  8. Deb says:

    Your story is one of intrigue and sadness, what a shame Mary had enough strength to turn away from the family fortune but not enough to believe in herself! Nicely done!

  9. Ameena k.g says:

    I loved how you told the story in the present and let us fill in the blanks as to what went wrong to get her to this decision.

  10. amanpan says:

    You expressed this beautifully. Well done.

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